Friday, October 15, 2010

poem from a wordle: the Flock

 





the Flock


Before the bitter winter comes,
the purple martins gather.
No extract of coal could be more black
than their glossy iridescent masses.

They trade away winter in hook-neck gourds
and staircase-less apartments
for the southern kiss of warmer days,
and the drooping mass of Spanish moss.

Mosquitoes bred in muddy sloughs
they pluck like cherries on the wing.
Their passing, thick as shadow,
is right and perfect on the sky
as a cat on a porch, blue lines on a page,
or a smile on a porcelain doll.




October wordle

16 comments:

pwf said...

all that, and I had to go back to work in "staircase"

Derrick said...

But you did, so bravo! I really like the images you've created here; purple martins, muddy sloughs, drooping moss and all!

gautami tripathy said...

Wonderful images. A pleasure..

extraction

Diane T said...

Pwf, striking images and words! Brava to you!

soulsmusic said...

Can only echo what has already been said. This was a pleasure to read, perhaps because your own pleasure was smiling through each line. Congrats,

Elizabeth

Bloggin'withAmanda said...

"drooping mass of Spanish Moss" and 'Cherries on the wing"? Lovely visions for any reader who is treated to reading this!

rallentanda said...

Beautiful imagery and a lovely legato feel to this one. Enjoyed it.

gospelwriter said...

I like this a lot - lyrical verse, lovely images. Love the southern kiss of warmer days...

Cara Holman said...

I love the image of the purple martins gathering in "glossy iridescent masses". Well done!

pwf said...

Thanks to all of you. I think this one is relaxing.

christopher said...

A wonderful idea worked out with a yeoman's craft. I love the shift in perspective, that a mosquito is surely a delicacy in the eyes of mosquito eaters.

If it were my poem I would not be done yet, feeling I could lift it from really good to great without much effort at all, just a few words.

Some of us feel that fantasy is the only sane way to deal with a wordle of 12 really diverse words but what we really mean is deal with them easily. You have demonstrated a way through that holds fast to this world.

vivinfrance said...

great imagery. Glad you "hung in there"

Tumblewords: said...

Fine imagery - I can see the whole things and I love it!

liv2write2day said...

So well-done. I'm amazed how you crafted this wordle with perfect imagery.

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Christine said...

Wonderful imagery. I also liked the mosquitoes as a delicacy!

Leo said...

wonderful throughout, but I esp like the way u ended it!

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