Big Tent Poetry |
the funeral home looked like gone with the wind
the last niece arrived late for the viewing.
she skirted the swarm of ghouls milling
at the door. camouflaged in dusty dull
black carapaces, the females mimed at
humanity with tears and scraps of laces.
once past the canopy, an unctuous guide
in graphite chanted her through hushed
doors and past the crush of zombies,
messily strewing the dead man's wake
with the remains of his backbone and
his embellished balls. The debris of a
half-eaten child in miniature mourning
answered to the fates of the bereaved.
her uncle was already on the loading
dock, fortunate.
(when I copied the words, half-eaten and child ended up together. I could not resist)
17 comments:
How fantabulously morbid and you used such a remarkable conglomeration of words!
LOVE IT!
Read my Big Tent Poem here.
Thank you Julie.
Looking at it again, I think it should be formatted as prose. Don't you think?
Or written with better flow.
I was never one to like horror shows, always covered my head with a blanket. This IS morbid.
Shock!
You read that as literal?
Please say you are ribbing me.
like your comment at big tent! one is helpless when "half-eaten" and "child" get paired up like that! :)
well, I have to say "half-eaten child" quite fits in with the rest of the poem - a tongue-in-cheek write, I'd like to think? well done, anyway, wordle-wise...
i really like where you went with this.....nicely done and thanks for sharing
Wild use of wordle. Fascinating. I'll come back and read it periodically, just because.
"already on the loading/dock, fortunate." Yesssssss.
I enjoyed the sounds of lines like: "the females mimed at/humanity with tears and scraps of laces." and
"an unctuous guide/in graphite chanted her through hushed/doors".
Macabre and funny!
Thank you, carolee. I enjoyed the prompt
Yes, gospelwriter, tongue (and only my own, at that) in cheek.
I appreciate all of your comments.
in the crush of exaggerated mourning there are always circus characters dying to be heard... gone with the wind yep... i can totally see that scene... especially so .."..the unctuous guide in granite.."... dorothy calling
Hello, Pie lady.
So glad you didn't resist! I loved this gruesome romp, starting with the glorious title!
Shall I say beautifully morbid? It works for me!
timeless flies search for fries
And do get aboard the Poetry Train every Monday
mornings and thereafter!
I see too much time spent with Quirk Classics.
For some reason, even single-story funeral homes have columns. Almost like the striped pole for barbers.
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